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She cares about him so much,
Your nothing compared to him.
He's everything she wants,
Your everything she hates.
So many similarities, and yet so different.
He loves you now, and I never stopped,
And I forever will, will he?
You give me hope in life,
He's looking foward in life.
You may lose him at anytime,
I've lost you so many times,
I wish I could do something,
He's afraid to say something.
There's nothing left for me to do.
There's something left for him and you.
©2007-2009 ~Nightmare05-gotr
:iconnightmare05-gotr:

Author's Comments

Say what you want, I'm ready for any criticism. I wrote this last night, and I don't regret any of it (there's a first).
I'm sorry if this makes you feel bad or whatever. I'm losing sight of who I really am. If that happens again, the worst is yet to come. I wish I could change things, but I can't. I can't help it and I'm sorry everyone. I have to go now, maybe I'll see you later tonight. Bye

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:iconweindorts:
I really love this poem : )
:iconchireiangel:
:sigh:

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"What lies behind us, and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies inside of us." -Ralph Waldo Emerson
:iconveggen:
...I had something in mind but couldn't put it to words... so, I'll too just say :sigh:

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Created a kingdom,
reached for the wisdom,
failed in becoming a God....
:icondisturbedrenn:
You should never feel bad about expressing yourself. If others are put down by it then it just means that your words have enough power to touch them. Your work is beautiful. I hope you find yourself... if you do tell me how you did it, for I have been lost for years.

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Just Live.. For you know not when you wont have that luxury
:icondominiscus:
I hope to be constructive with this. I fully realize that this poem was most likely inspired by a personal conflict you are experiencing. Beyond a few minor grammatical errors, etc, that feeling comes through. However, I think that perhaps you are being constrained by this emotive mind frame; to the point that some of this is hard to follow. I mean to say the "relationships" within the poem are slightly difficult to keep track of as the poem progresses chronologically. But I do think you have a good basis, and that if you re-focused some things, you would be solid. Try to make it clear to us what you have experienced, rather than leaving the guess-work up to the reader.
:iconsinge723:
i really like this it sounds like it should be a song
:iconstumblingangel:
i think it's beautiful... it reminds me a lil too much of someone i know

its hard when it feels like you're loosing you, cuz it seems like you should be something you always have...
:iconnightmare05-gotr:
The confusion is part of conflict and the only way to express that is to add some confusion to the work. It makes you think about it as you read.
:iconnightmare05-gotr:
I'm glad to know someone is going through something similar and can actually connect to what I'm writing. I know exactly what you mean, loss is something that is inexplainable by normal means, and I wouldn't even know how to try and explain my personal experience if it wasn't for poetry.

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